Could somebody tell me what they think of this rough beginning of a story I wrote?

It was really good, it had lots of suspense and kept making me want to read more and more. The story gave you a real good thought of what the people in the story looked like and their personalty. I very rarely read books, but this one really drew me in and made me just want to read more and more of it. The only thing I didn't understand in this story was Marilyn's dream, I didn't understand how it tyed into the story but I think to understand it you would have to read the whole story. I really enjoyed it and didn't relize I read so much :) it was really really good! I give 110 out of 100 :D